Comments on: First sentence in an article from the Houston Chronicle about jails with no a/c http://www.clusterflock.org/2009/07/first-sentence-in-an-article-from-the-houston-chronicle-about-jails-with-no-ac.html a site about everything Tue, 14 Feb 2012 05:27:04 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Patrick Burleson http://www.clusterflock.org/2009/07/first-sentence-in-an-article-from-the-houston-chronicle-about-jails-with-no-ac.html/comment-page-1#comment-534051 Patrick Burleson Thu, 09 Jul 2009 19:42:33 +0000 http://www.clusterflock.org/?p=27339#comment-534051 What does it say that I actually enjoyed the creativity of that sentence? Decent intro line for a feature story. Certainly it had me wanting the rest of the article. Although I do agree with Daryl, that has some promise for Bulwer-Lytton. What does it say that I actually enjoyed the creativity of that sentence? Decent intro line for a feature story. Certainly it had me wanting the rest of the article.

Although I do agree with Daryl, that has some promise for Bulwer-Lytton.

]]> By: Sheila Ryan http://www.clusterflock.org/2009/07/first-sentence-in-an-article-from-the-houston-chronicle-about-jails-with-no-ac.html/comment-page-1#comment-533964 Sheila Ryan Thu, 09 Jul 2009 18:30:33 +0000 http://www.clusterflock.org/?p=27339#comment-533964 My friend Lee pointed out that an editor should have blue-pencilled "from hell". "Heat lamps from hell" is both excessive and silly. My friend Lee pointed out that an editor should have blue-pencilled “from hell”. “Heat lamps from hell” is both excessive and silly.

]]> By: Daryl Scroggins http://www.clusterflock.org/2009/07/first-sentence-in-an-article-from-the-houston-chronicle-about-jails-with-no-ac.html/comment-page-1#comment-533934 Daryl Scroggins Thu, 09 Jul 2009 18:16:08 +0000 http://www.clusterflock.org/?p=27339#comment-533934 Somebody has a promising future with the Bulwer-Lytton contest. Somebody has a promising future with the Bulwer-Lytton contest.

]]> By: Sheila Ryan http://www.clusterflock.org/2009/07/first-sentence-in-an-article-from-the-houston-chronicle-about-jails-with-no-ac.html/comment-page-1#comment-533923 Sheila Ryan Thu, 09 Jul 2009 18:12:37 +0000 http://www.clusterflock.org/?p=27339#comment-533923 The world's <a href="http://http://www.clusterflock.org/2009/07/going-to-hell.html" rel="nofollow">going to hell</a> under a thousand heat lamps. The world’s going to hell under a thousand heat lamps.

]]> By: Sheila Ryan http://www.clusterflock.org/2009/07/first-sentence-in-an-article-from-the-houston-chronicle-about-jails-with-no-ac.html/comment-page-1#comment-533802 Sheila Ryan Thu, 09 Jul 2009 17:13:49 +0000 http://www.clusterflock.org/?p=27339#comment-533802 James and the Atomic Peach. James and the Atomic Peach.

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